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Reviews For: The Embrace

Anya Tempest 2006-01-10 ch 1,	abuseWow. That was very chilling and extremely enjoyable. It was subtly written, and had a lot of lovely imagery too. I noticed a few mistakes, though: "when i decided to take my night-walks" - that should be "I" "yellow crecent blade" - it shouls be "crescent" "The trees, looming" - I'm not sure if it needs the comma there. However, these were only a few errors, and they didn't take away from the atmosphere of your tale. All in all, some very nice work. two thumbs up.
James Daly 2005-03-12 ch 1,	abuseGreetings once again, Bravo! That was brilliant! That really made me shiver, I really do love a good scare every once and awhile. Again, I love your usage of words and sentences to tell the tale, such sentences as "the moon was but a cresent blade, cutting across the sky" or "The wind of the forest gave sighs of laughter" really added to the creepyness of the story. It gave me a good sense satisfaction when I reached the end of the story...the man is driven to death by the spirits of the forest...Classic. Keep up the good work. -James Daly
Ahemait 2005-03-05 ch 1,	abusewhoa...whoa. that was really strange. i liked the last two lines though and it was pretty good, though i'm wondering what killed you (her). ah well. it was a good read, nevertheless. a few grammar errors int he beginning, but not enough to worry about.