interesting, can't wait to read the next chapter.

Great story! Update soon!

i read this the first time you posted it. I love it are you going to take it further then last time?

wow...lots of visual elements to this story. liked the first-person narrative very much. the detail itself was a little lacking, but nothing that the author couldn't easily correct. also...very much liked the end...i'm keen on a surprise, so it was very nice to have something to think about. good job overall

This story made me cry! More than once. I really love this story. Its so sweet. Dominic is sweet... even though hes so mean about it. Stupid coffee. But he was nice. Ah! Cant make up my mind. I liked Dominic. Yes. And how you discribed heaven, that was so pretty! It sort of made me think of how Sarah described heaven in A Little Princess. This is a really good story. See? Still crying over it

I really liked the story . It held a valuable lesson adn it ws perfectly lengthed. I liked it alot. keep up writing like this.,

I liked it lots and lots!

YES YES YES! WHOO! I found a computer, and I'm very happy now! yay!

That was a pretty cool story. I'm kind of sorry it's over. Best of luck in the contest!

I loved your story, but why did it have to be so short? any second parts? please? maybe a little death/human romance? haha. I love it, it's so original in it's own way.

My thoughts? Brilliant, amazing, wonderful, beautifully written. That's just a few of them. I really enjoyed this story.

i really liked this ending.

but i have to say, maybe i'm just REALLY dense (quite possible) but I can't seem to comprehend why Dominac chose/let her live. I'm also curious as to why she had ended up getting hit and just not dying. like why he put her in that moment.

but maybe that's what you're aiming for. open to interpretation. that's fine to.

Wow, I really hope that this isn't the end, it's very good. If you have more, post it, please! I'm anxious to see what may happen next.

Oh no! Trinity isn't dead, is she? Well, I mean, she is, but she's not PERMANANTLY dead, is she? Whoa. This is an amazing story!

so good. Dominic sounds really hot!