I am currently leaving for college this August, and I can only imagine how its going to affect my mother.

I hope I interpreted the poem correctly... a parent watching their son grow up and leave, and wishing they would be always at their side.

If I have interpreted this poem correctly, then I have found it has truly captured the idea of losing someone.

A line that stuck out to me was:

Is it so wrong to abandon God?To blame him for the week he gave to you and took from me.

I found it interesting how since God was abandoned, "him" and "he" were not capitalized (into "Him" and "He") as hymns and psalms, which have not abandoned him/Him, would. Syntactical/grammatical rules broken and followed can do much to get a point across in poetry.

LOVELY.

Cordially,Jake

Thank you for the review.. you're right drank is the right word.. I really like you poem.. but I felt kind a lonely reading it..T_T It's a great poem ^_^

First off, thanks for reviewing my pome. This is pome is varry interesting, seeming to express so many emotions in so few lines. Like your other story, this is well writen.Sh'arra

Dammit mo you made me cry!* WAH*TT_TT

. . . wow.

please R&R some of my work. I'll return the favor.