nice imagery used! i really like this one. good job on it, keep up the good work.

This is really great. Very nice imagery, and I usually do not like non-rhyming poems.

hi, this was really well written and i like the general idea and flow of the poem. i don't think fluidic is a word...and the wordiness and hyperbolic terms take away from any kind of emotion...atleast for me. but there are different ways to use language...good writing!