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| The Hellion 2005-07-06 ch 13,   | This is quite an engaging story you've created. Each chapter easily captured my interest, and I also want to comment on your thrilling prologue--I loved it. The characters and the plot are classic and already I'm on the edge of my seat held tightly by suspense. Magnificent job so far! Kudos to your lovely talent. I can't wait to read more. -Skye (I highly doubt Trip realizes what he's gone and gotten himself into...) |
| BlueAki 2005-06-08 ch 13, | Hum...I wonder who this guy is? Seems like an ** to me. |
| Strangergirl 2005-06-01 ch 3, | This story is awesome, but a tad too slow for me to continue reading. If only there was a climax throughout the whole story. It reminds me of The Giver. The author of that book took a while in the beginning, but it was well worth the climax, as I bet is yours... but I have to go to bed soon because its 4:26, hehehe... see you later. |
| underminingfaith 2005-05-13 ch 12, | nice story - it started off slowly, but got interesting in Chp 3. You keep up the suspense well during the ball chapter - it's a bit cliched but good all the same. |
| nano 2005-05-13 ch 12, | very interesting |
| citrus scented 2005-05-12 ch 3, | Ok my only critism is between Trip and Eve, I just think its alittle clishe but overall it would make a beautiful couple. I like the plot line, its very addictive just like you're other pieces! although that probably just your writing style- very good. Im enjoying this muchly, cant wait to read more. |
| citrus scented 2005-05-12 ch 2, | wow wonderful piece of writing! really I l;ove the plot line, the characters seem strong and intresting, and the writing wraps it all together perfectly. |
| citrus scented 2005-05-12 ch 1, | it sounds like it has alot of promise! cant wait to start reading it. it may have been done before, but its really caught my attentions already just by the prolouge! |
| Brianne Tyler 2005-05-08 ch 12, | I like this a lot. And this is just a shot in the dark but I'm guessing their going to kidnap Eve. ^^ I hope to see a new chapter very soon! |
| Alliance, THE 2005-05-08 ch 12, | Hmm... well er... I dunno what to say evxept This is good carry on. Please |
| The Random Witness 2005-04-18 ch 11, | HALLOW! I'm back from NZ!Yay! -Wow you've really done well with this storie i LUV it! The father was so horrible! i can't believe he could say that stuff!So much Woe and questions to be answered! i can't wait for more! BEAUT! ~Ami |
| The Alliance 2005-04-17 ch 1, | Not as good as the other chapters. IT seems to be from another athors hand perhaps? I dunno still carry on writing. |
| Janaii 2005-04-14 ch 10, | Omg, I love this story! Its so great its awesome! Plz continue, PLZ, PLZ, PLZ! |
| Napoleon Incarnate 2005-04-12 ch 10, | THis is a very good take on the whole powers and genetic modification theme. Very well done especially the love between Trip and Eve. However it has all been done before still this is one of the most gripping stories I've read in a long time, you realy know how to make the characters seem alive. Please update because chapter 10 is very short. |
| Napoleon Incarnate 2005-04-12 ch 10, | THis is a very good take on the whole powers and genetic modification theme. Very well done especially the love between Trip and Eve. However it has all been done before still this is one of the most gripping stories I've read in a long time, you realy know how to make the characters seem alive. Please update because chapter 10 is very short. |