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| starleaf 2008-05-05 ch 1,  | abuseRG review! Very nice... I love the message. There are only a few things I would really change, but they're just personal style. I don't really like "feathers and head wraps drape us" all that much.. I'm not too sure how to change it, though. I'm stumped on that one. "That's where my ancestors (should be ancestors') souls remain" sounds better to me as "Where slaves were stolen and my ancestors' souls remain" or "where slaves were stolen; where my ancestors' souls remain." The chicken bone rhyme is cute, kinda goes with the whole southern thing, haha. Anyway, it flows pretty well and the only things I would change, as I said, were more personal taste than anything else. Good job!:) |
| TheAngelofhope 2005-03-07 ch 1, | abuseShort, and good. |
| Misstress Nicole 2005-03-07 ch 1, | abuseHey, it's me and I noe it doesn't count if I reveiw. But this is one of my favorite poems. I love it, the flow, the meaning in each and every word! You should enter this in another contest one that isn't bogus! I love this poem, my friends love this poem. It's makeing a lot of ppl look differently at the world and the cultures that make up the world. Try it again, and write another poem, post is and watch the reviews rack up! Love your sister, MissNikki |