Hm maybe frisbees and skipping ropes contrasted a bit too much with Juliet's balcony for me. ><

Just wanted to point out that Technicolor is spelt with no 'U' even in the UK because Technicolor is a name, not a word.

ah—shakesperean comic-tragedy,

¿wherefore, wherefore art thou my juliett?

does it carry one or 2 t's,—"¡mint please!"

when you put it that way's all's a play,

& having brunch at raffles makes more sense,

for indiscriminate our appetite,

requires a bit of piece,—satiety,—

lest satyr wild roams busy boulevard,

& we forget mortality's dire bounds.

you made use of several biggie words, which make the poem rather heavy and doesnt fully bring across the idea as well. a little overdone here.

hmn, i definately like this piece, but i'm a lil confused by some of the vocabulary XD (don't mind me, i've been doing social studies all day, so i'm pretty drained). oh well, i love your descriptions, simply...beautiful ^-^

~Sumi-chan; what you call love, i call pain.

overdone, but i get what you mean yeah. not bad at all though. -kismet.

awesome poem, again. I'd put you on fave's list, but mine are full already...

Intriguing. The vocabulary is perhaps a little too sophisticated here -- some of the 'big words' you use seem unnecessary and hamper the reading of the poem. I still really like this, though. I particularly like the opening line.

Not a bad job on this.