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| seenay 2005-08-17 ch 1, anon. | abuseHm maybe frisbees and skipping ropes contrasted a bit too much with Juliet's balcony for me. >< Just wanted to point out that Technicolor is spelt with no 'U' even in the UK because Technicolor is a name, not a word. |
| Manuel Fajar 2005-03-17 ch 1,  | abuseah—shakesperean comic-tragedy, ¿wherefore, wherefore art thou my juliett? does it carry one or 2 t's,—"¡mint please!" when you put it that way's all's a play, & having brunch at raffles makes more sense, for indiscriminate our appetite, requires a bit of piece,—satiety,— lest satyr wild roams busy boulevard, & we forget mortality's dire bounds. |
| moonarised polane 2005-03-16 ch 1, | abuseyou made use of several biggie words, which make the poem rather heavy and doesnt fully bring across the idea as well. a little overdone here. |
| KonekOniko 2005-03-09 ch 1, | abusehmn, i definately like this piece, but i'm a lil confused by some of the vocabulary XD (don't mind me, i've been doing social studies all day, so i'm pretty drained). oh well, i love your descriptions, simply...beautiful ^-^ ~Sumi-chan; what you call love, i call pain. |
| negligible fictional force 2005-03-08 ch 1, | abuseoverdone, but i get what you mean yeah. not bad at all though. -kismet. |
| myno 2005-03-07 ch 1, | abuseawesome poem, again. I'd put you on fave's list, but mine are full already... |
| Meaningless Julia 2005-03-07 ch 1, | abuseIntriguing. The vocabulary is perhaps a little too sophisticated here -- some of the 'big words' you use seem unnecessary and hamper the reading of the poem. I still really like this, though. I particularly like the opening line. |
| TheAngelofhope 2005-03-07 ch 1, | abuseNot a bad job on this. |