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seenay
2005-08-17
ch 1, anon.
abuseHm maybe frisbees and skipping ropes contrasted a bit too much with Juliet's balcony for me. ><

Just wanted to point out that Technicolor is spelt with no 'U' even in the UK because Technicolor is a name, not a word.
Manuel Fajar
2005-03-17
ch 1,
abuseah—shakesperean comic-tragedy,

¿wherefore, wherefore art thou my juliett?

does it carry one or 2 t's,—"¡mint please!"

when you put it that way's all's a play,

& having brunch at raffles makes more sense,

for indiscriminate our appetite,

requires a bit of piece,—satiety,—

lest satyr wild roams busy boulevard,

& we forget mortality's dire bounds.
moonarised polane
2005-03-16
ch 1,
abuseyou made use of several biggie words, which make the poem rather heavy and doesnt fully bring across the idea as well. a little overdone here.
KonekOniko
2005-03-09
ch 1,
abusehmn, i definately like this piece, but i'm a lil confused by some of the vocabulary XD (don't mind me, i've been doing social studies all day, so i'm pretty drained). oh well, i love your descriptions, simply...beautiful ^-^

~Sumi-chan; what you call love, i call pain.
negligible fictional force
2005-03-08
ch 1,
abuseoverdone, but i get what you mean yeah. not bad at all though. -kismet.
myno
2005-03-07
ch 1,
abuseawesome poem, again. I'd put you on fave's list, but mine are full already...
Meaningless Julia
2005-03-07
ch 1,
abuseIntriguing. The vocabulary is perhaps a little too sophisticated here -- some of the 'big words' you use seem unnecessary and hamper the reading of the poem. I still really like this, though. I particularly like the opening line.
TheAngelofhope
2005-03-07
ch 1,
abuseNot a bad job on this.
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