FictionPress.com - let the words flow
| FictionPress.com - let the words flow |
|
| Home Just In Communities Forums Beta Readers Dictionary Search | Login Register Extras |
| dpbclover 2008-06-08 ch 1,  | abuseThat was good. |
| Xalga 2008-06-03 ch 1, | abuseI'm not sure if you ment Ever or every, either way works for poetry though. The last line, the . and ,. Just watch out for those. I mean I make mistakes, a good number, but it's always good to try and catch 'em when it's a short piece like this. You make a good use of the space you have, the imagery is simple and open. Keep it up. |
| Emely 2006-10-07 ch 1, | abuseHey, I thought this poem was very simple but nice. Once again., lifting my wings. The period should probably be taken out, although it would probably be good without the period or the comma. Play with the punctuation. There doesn't need to be a comma after every line, and every line doesn't need to start with a capitalized letter. I liked this. Good job, and good luck! ~~Emely |
| Green Wizzerd 2005-06-08 ch 1, | abuseInteresting and a good discription of a phinox |
| InSilverShadows 2005-03-11 ch 1, | abuseWowzers! Luff it... is it haiku? Oh...nevermind. ((Whoa, deja vu..)) O.o |
| Tk.T 2005-03-10 ch 1, | abuseShort and lovely. I liked this so much that I'm going to put it on my fav. stories list. A very well-put-together poem. Congrats! Happy writing! Tk.T~ |
| The System Mother 2005-03-10 ch 1, | abuseOH pretty! I like it a lot ^_^ |
| Bookworm12-8-90 2005-03-08 ch 1, | abuseaw... it's so pretty!! |
| Jordy 2005-03-07 ch 1, anon. | abusedark! witch means Jordy likes it!i think the best part is "Rising, from scattered ashes,The breath of ages now renewed" well BYE! *Jordy runs of to talk to her minion but runs in to a wall instead* |
| Macca Lane 2005-03-07 ch 1, | abuselovely beless ya, all ica n sat well all i can say is lvoely |