Love the loose, easy rhyming scheme; it seems simple, but at the same time it's so pretty.

The last stanza was the best; certain words were really well-placed (such as the "just" in the final line).

I think this is one of those subjects in which the writing could easily turn out cliche, but thank God you avoided that!

::applauds::

Great job!

Beautiful, well written. Familiar subject, and the whole of this was strengthened by the ending, which I love --the last stanza is just amazing--Well done.

Oh my god. *jaw drops*

"...But the brokenness is beautiful-/The pieces on the floor,/As they glitter like a million flames..."

This is FANTASTIC. It's amazing, and so true! I can really feel the emotion, see the imagery. Out of ten, this would be an 11.

*gawps* You should publish this! I'm dead certain it would get an award.

Keep writing!

--Kohikari*

Really like this one. Keep up the good work.