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| SilverSpinner 2005-04-08 ch 1,  | abuseWow...I really like this one...(I sometimes think of myself as a character in a movie, too.)...I love the metaphors throughout, but mostly I feel like I absolutely relate to this one. And I adore the title--the title alone is just awesome. |
| nut jab 2005-03-16 ch 1, | abuseoh-so pretty. I liked the holly wood extra bit. |
| THCampbell 2005-03-10 ch 1, | abuseNicely done. Your imagery is fantastic. the neon cross, godfearing priest, and gods of self-indulgence! Kings and Queens and Hollywood. It really spoke to me. Thank you. |
| asyousaid 2005-03-09 ch 1, | abuseThe neon imagery is awfully nice, as is the Hollywood reference :-D really drives home the impact, I think |
| Je-Nie-Dieu 2005-03-09 ch 1, | abuseSome people can't do pain well. You can. |
| The Melissa Occult 2005-03-08 ch 1, | abuseI've seen some pieces like this before, but none of them used the imagery like this. I liked the words, I don't usually read things the way they are meant to be read, I read the connections between the words, and some of them linked together rather nicely from my point of view. |
| negligible fictional force 2005-03-08 ch 1, | abuseyou make thinking in a food court seem like reaching nirvana in a lotus yoga pose. and oh how i love it. -kismet. |
| Made in U.S.A. 2005-03-07 ch 1, | abusewow i adore the idea of it all and its written beautifully and i love it and love it and love it. sorry i can't give a good review can't seem to focus on anything without my adderol. anyway good job. love it and keep writing :D |
| i was a postcard 2005-03-07 ch 1, | abuseI just don't know what to say - I adore Shelley, so that really got my attention. Some brilliant lines in here: "as i walk in and out, an extra in a hollywood filmwith a sad song just for me to round out the atmosphere" "i'm not a part of your prized china collection" The articulation of pain is simply lovely. I love it! |
| sweety167 2005-03-07 ch 1, | abuseI like the idea behind this. |