short but sweet...

very short, but i understand that you may need time to think about what comes next (happens to me all the time) nice work so far; i like how you had the character trying to resist...looking forward to more!

if you still need help by the time you read this or whatever, feel free to contact me via email or AIM. i'm not the best writer, but i might be able to think of something.

this is pretty good, i liked the thoughts goin thru the person's head

id like to read more if it continues

jeremy

Very good scene. Great descriptions, perfect imagery. This would work well in a longer piece. Nice work, keep writing.

**Slave**

I think the entire first half of this is great. I really like how you get into the character's mind and the line about praying sometimes working is especially nice. However, I felt that falling asleep at the end and simply leaving it there was anti-climatic. You've built up this moment and then nothing seems to come of it, not even a dream or something tangible. So that is my suggestion-- you've started something quite interesting, but you need to follow through. Good luck w/ your writing!

Heya.

I really liked it. Are you going to continue the story, or was that it? It was good but i think you could make a fantastic story out of it - in the eyes of a werewolf.^_^

I've got a transformation in one of my works - but she's a black leopard (or panther)

Good luck with future writing.

Stephie x