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| LOTRMS 2006-03-24 ch 5,  | abuseUsually I'm intimidated by the longer stories, but this one was worth it. I liked it a lot and you did a great job of getting all the little details in and painting a good picture in the reader's mind. A few things I might change, you should write a review! Also, there are a few gramatical things, and you might try shorter paragraphs especially in the first chapter. Good work, keep it up! |
| Shadow 2006-01-01 ch 5, anon. | abuseThis is a awsome story! Please update! |
| Ixchella Samara 2005-12-09 ch 5, | abuseThis story is great! Full of detail, i wanna read more. |
| Jesse 2005-03-28 ch 3, anon. | abuselauren you are awesome. and you write awesome. and i like to read you...well, your writing anyways. it was fun. have fun |