You have an excellent start to what I am sure will develop into a promising story. I can't wait to learn more about Nathul; he is an extremely intriguing character. Good job at writing the story in present tense, you do it beautifully. I hope you update soon!

Excellent beginning. I like Nathul, since I hate all kinds of hunters. This story has great potential: you handle the prose and dialogues well.

It is extremely difficult to srite in the present tense. I would never attempt it. You've done a great job here!

I like it alot. You're hooked right after the first sentence becasue you need to know about this mone, like what his limits are and what elemntal monks are and stuff, but you also want to learn about him, like his story, like why he was taken and all that sort of stuff.

'A lonely figure travels down an even lonelier path.' Yum, that is like pure poetry, beautiful.

OK - I like this right away, but it's much too short. You create a character who is interesting in your first sentence. Who is he? Where did he come from? Needs a lot more detail - because I LIKE it!!