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Reviews For: In The Light
artcriticx
2005-03-11
ch 1, 		Actually quite ok for your poems, but with the line 'Turning into a big grin' it somehow becomes strange. The 'grin' doesn't fit into the register of a love poem. Also the phrase 'In my light' sounds a bit conceited.
dax87434
2005-03-09
ch 1, 		that's very sweet and oh yeah nicely written
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