Nice poem ;)

Not as good as your otheres, but I like the message.

I'd never heard of Naani poems before this, and reading these I am inspired to write my own. "Liquid Being" was undoubtedly your best; though, I suppose if you consider the other poems within the limits of a Naani poem, they're very high-caliber. I wouldn't know...I've never seen them before! Original ideas and great work.

Eh, honestly I don't think it's very good. There are some high points, some nice imagery, but you tend to resort to cliched metaphors and overused poetic images. It's okay to good for fictionpress, but you've a long way to go, in my opinion.

dude, these Naani poems are so cool! and the fact that i'm Telugu makes them more special! anyway, great job...i was wondering, are you Telugu? oh, i really like Beautiful Melancholy and My Liquid Being the best. the last 2 lines of My Liquid Being touched me most...anyway, great job and keep it up...

I love some of the imagery here... "quicksilver heart" being my favorite. One criticism... you use the word "tears" in almost every one of these. Branch out... let us see what you can do.

"A thousand flavors of tears..."

I am so stealing that and using it somewhere.

I've written this style of poem once before, as a class assignment. This is so much better than what we produced...

my my my, youve been posting again, bout bloody time! and now: nice poems! they seem to have a great flow to them :)

Hey, me again! :)These were really nice, MJC. I especially liked the first one. I hope you'll be pleased to know that I've been printing out some of your poems (or sometimes just a favorite stanza from one of them) and sticking it into my organizer for school. It sure makes for a nice break from this lists of homework assignments! lol :P "Thought" is going to be stuck in momentarily.

quicksilver heart. Great line. You're really good at these

I just noticed it has a rhyme. I wonder if you meant to do that. *shrugs* Awesome job my

Aww, sad, but honest and true. Very

wow. Great last line in this. Seems you've found your muse

*blinks* wow. First line is really imaginative. Hawke