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| darkgemini4656 2005-03-10 ch 1,   | the string of life continues to intertwine...i like it...its good to incorperate the sorrows of life...and the time that your hands get stuck in the knot...and your foot slips from the tight rope...nice job...cyanide... |
| ThatJimguy 2005-03-09 ch 1, | Great imagry again. This poem really has an "itsy bistsy spider" quality to it. Great work. |
| heffiji 2005-03-09 ch 1, | You managed to express the feeling of hopelessness and sorrow quite well in this. Nice job. |
| Karma Chameleon 2005-03-09 ch 1, | you're right, it is more angst-like than the first, but good nonetheless. I like them both. Great Job. -Karma Chameleon |
| whyt forest 2005-03-09 ch 1, | tis very good. you managed to make me feel a bit knotted, which means that it affects people. you conveyed the tragedy really well. ~whyt forest |