Nice take on this.

oh, this is wonderful. the "you did warp" toward the end was a bit awkward for me personally, but i suspect maybe you were going along with the "did you" theme but in reverse (if you get what i'm saying), which is clever, so i think it's fine.

the longing made me sad. great work again. you keep going and going and going.

LIKE THIS POEM THIS COULD SO EASILY BE A SONG ALSO CAN I SAY A BIG BIG BIG THANK YOU FOR the reveiw you did for my poem you are the only one who has bothered to comment on the content of the poem and what it was about and i am glad that atleast someone understands it thank you,

great peice, i can relate to this, wow, i like it a lot, thank you for sharing