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xDecaying-Decadencex 2008-08-20 ch 1,	Quite stunning; in the way it's styled so differently to the story. It's pretty, and it's suprising as a peep-show of apparent heart-break. It's a powerful unexpected sort of insight and it's going in my favourites. Love it.
lilylupin7 2006-08-22 ch 1,	This was beautiful and poetic. The contrasts were well-done and added to the over all effect. I rather like the last paragraph: "Once upon a time, in a land far away and a different world and a different moment..." It's so sad and sweet at the same time.
Firespirit44 2006-05-16 ch 1,	I haven't read that particular story yet so I have no idea what kind of a person Ember is..though from here, she seems to be a person that looks very determined, strong, a good leader..yet has her own little insecurities, as every normal girl should. I shall read your other stories tomorrow. I hate you for being able to write so...realistically. xD And you know I mean that as a compliment.
Starlite Dragin 2006-01-26 ch 1,	Man, I wish I could write like this. It was a little random, but good anyways. Does the whole 'they lived happily ever after' mean that this is slightly shippy? Oh, whatever, It's still cool. Honestly, I like your humor better, even though it gats me into trouble in computer class when I'm reading this instead of doing work...
Indubidably 2005-10-31 ch 1,	Aww, that hurt my heart, t'was very depressing to read, yet so beautiful, i love your To Fight Or Fall its brilliant, it started off light hearted ...then BAM you were sucked in and everything was so complictaed and knotted and..just wow. WOW keep it up and be loved :D
Aryanda 2005-08-11 ch 1,	oh, wow. this is touching, and it helps understanding the characters better. this is really, really...(searches for word)...brilliant.
StarsOverWonderland 2005-06-29 ch 1,	i like this.the concept of being put up on a pedestal and loved by those who see you always fascinates me.wonderful job. i especially like the last part, the way you did the once upon a time thing, as it felt like a fairytale all the way through.
Nam Ghosthand 2005-05-29 ch 1,	wow... this is really insightful. It wort of hints that they know what their doing to each other... I think that you should put some of the different parts of this into 'To Fight or Fall' because this is really really good.
Band Geek17 2005-05-09 ch 1,	That is so amazing! I'm really glad you wrote that - can't believe it took me so long to find and read it! It's so cool how you characterize them as walking contraditions, fire and ice, gold and marble, and yet they see themselves in each other (I'm guessing that's what you meant by the mirrors). Very complex character. And I absolutely adore the way you ended it. Beautiful.
adu937 2005-04-19 ch 1,	I absolutely loved this one-shot as I do "To Fight or Fall" and applaud it for the incredibly mature writing which is slowly dwindling in fictionpress and also the incredible thematic statements you've managed to incorporate. o yeah, and are you looking for a beta? You have great grammar skills but I'm an English teacher's aide and if you wanted a second opinion I could help you out. if you're interested, email me at adu937@yahoo.com or tell me in your next TFOF chapter. Thanks, and keep up the great writing!
Winged Shadow 2005-04-09 ch 1,	Cool . . . . . freaky . . . .
cassandra26 2005-04-07 ch 1,	this is my review for the sketch and the new ch. I just lu the ending...the boy gives the little girl a flower. I can't explain..but there's something so delicate..so endearing. I just bet a dollar they had a past! No...I double bet it! Most stories got a past, don't they? Update soon!
C. X. Blackfeather 2005-04-06 ch 1,	"she’ll smash her mirror into glittering shards and ignore her bleeding fist and continue her duties" - that is so Ember. My favorite image of the enitre thing, except perhaps for the stone mask image. This is a great character study, revealing an emotional side to Ember that we don't see even though she narrates. Perhaps you should add more of these images and concepts in the actual story -- we only see what you show us, so even if she is your most complex character you must show all sides of her. And that's hard sometimes, to convey all of a person, because she's so completely in your head that you only need a few key sentences to picture her wholly. Not that you're doing a bad job of conveying your characters. It's just that I saw a completely different side to Ember in this, and as an author you don't want to leave any important part of a picture out. Yet you already show us weaknesses in your characters that drive them to create little subplots and story-threads of their own (naturally! the best part of it), and I think that's what I like the most about your writing. Please keep up the good work!
Orient Fox 2005-03-12 ch 1,	GAH!! Taken me forever to review!! I'm so sorry! (I hate vocab with a passion...but I must return to it in a sec, so this review will be short) I'm so sorry!! Ahem, this is really good and definitely gives the reader vast insight into the character of Ember and Cale. (I like this a lot. Now, if only more authors would do this) Anyways, I like your descriptions and vague dropping of clues/hints. Seriously helpful, this helpful set of background notes is also really well-written in language suitable for the passably smart (i.e. me, lol) and it is also entertaining. This is definitely not boring old cliff-notes typ-ish background notes, but more interesting, funny, and real. And yet, ironically enough (and sort of rubbing in Mr. Ol' Cliffnotes' face) these notes are way more funny, entertaining, and interesting than any Cliff-notes. ^_^ This is a definitely a good thing! The fascinating unraveling of the background of cold, ancient 16-year-old who's sun has nearly ceased to shine... ...this also shows and reveals that the writer of this has great writing skills and is a brilliant, humorous, and clever raconteur. The highest compliment I can give? I wish I'd written this!! Happy updating jules! Orient Fox
Emmy 2005-03-11 ch 1,	Ohmygod. That was so beautiful. I practically have tears in my eyes. Really. You must make a shippy chapter based on this. I mean it. You really should. Well on another note, I have an e-mial now (wince, very bad grammer, don't really know how to fix it though)so feel free to e-mail me now, althogh I can only check it at the library or my cousin house seeing as how I STILL DON'T HAVE A COMPUTER YET. Deep breaths, calming down now. Hehehe. Well see you at school. Bye.P.S. Imean it you better make a chapter based on this or else there will be pain involved. On your part. Evil Grin, hehehe. Bye, bye. ^.^

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