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| Green Tea Leaf 2005-03-09 ch 1,   | Hm.. It's a nice little thing, but some aspects of it don't make sense to me. I'm not sure I get the whole heaven's tears things and the transition to the hope/love thing. Maybe you might want to change/edit it a little bit? Right now, I feel the beginning is a bit... irrelevant. ^_^ |