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| midnitefaeri 2008-04-16 ch 29,  | abuseahh! the grief. i believe this would have been much better without this epilogue... but i just really hate sadness and i like the perfect happily ever after with them growing old together... *sigh* |
| midnitefaeri 2008-04-15 ch 20, | abuseI like the Dowager! |
| midnitefaeri 2008-04-15 ch 19, | abusei wonder what Lucien expression was when he said that line about the chaperone. I could imagine him laughing at it or utterly disappointed. |
| theslykit 2008-04-05 ch 29, | abuseOH MY GOD I HATE THE ENDING! MAKES ME WANT TO CRY! i actually had read this story a few years ago but i forgot about this sad ending...now i remember and it makes me feel worse!! horrid person..lol. great story though. i despise you for such a sad ending!! T_T |
| akaCHEEKS 2008-02-29 ch 29, | abusedude. i love the ending to this. i love it when its more reality like. but man the way you ended it though, its original. "Happiness comes in many forms, hers did not come in the form of money nor in the form of a big happy family – but a single son formed by love of the man she loved." hella good yo! |
| akaCHEEKS 2008-02-27 ch 20, | abusehaha nice chapter. i love that old lady that follows her around! |
| Giggles4evr 2007-11-21 ch 22, | abuseLucien whom lay helplessly on the deck of the ship is not correct. It shoule be Lucien who lay... She asked him questions on James should be She asked him questions about James. James is a person not a subject. his haunting past had grasped onto him. You don't need the onto and violently in that sentence. And on to should be two words. You use a lot of words that don't need to be there and you combine phrases that don't work. Perhaps it is better off her not knowing should be Perhaps she is better of not knowing. Or just She is better off not knowing. I'm only pointing out a few, but they are all through your story. I really do like your plot, even if it's hard to read. |
| Giggles4evr 2007-11-21 ch 21, | abusePlease learn when to and when not to use who and whom. For example... For/to whom is this addressesd? and ...who was wearing a loving look. |
| Giggles4evr 2007-11-20 ch 14, | abuseThere seems to be quite a few grammatical errors woven throughout. Periods where there shouldn't be, and either too many or too few words for a sentence. Also many of the phrases are awkward and I don’t mean the old style of English. The story line is good, if occasionally confusing. Thank you for writing. |
| gracembraced 2007-11-11 ch 20, anon. | abuseAND THAT REVIEW WAS TOTALLY FOR YOUR OTHER FICTION. :| I am an idiot. lol. |
| gracembraced 2007-11-11 ch 19, anon. | abuseI would give a signed review, but I had forgotten my password. :| So, I recently started reading this beyond amazing fiction, and I was hooked; no lie. I did not sleep. I LOVE your style of writing. It's refreshing, for no one cares to write in such a way anymore. Your plotline is genius. I've never read a storyline that even comes close to this. It's very original, fresh, and ... riveting. I love how you've built the characters. I personally love the tension between Amanda and Lucas. It makes me frustrated, and when they are amiable, I smile. I just basically love all their interactions. I love how Lucas is distancing himself from all things that would disappoint Amanda. OH, and now he's pushing HER away, because he feels he is becoming attached. And, she is starting to realize her feelings, so it makes it all the worse! Oh, it is all genius, I tell you. Excellent job. I'll be checking everyday, in case you update. LOVELOVELOVE it. :D |
| dancingflame315 2007-10-25 ch 21, anon. | abuseholy **! i was def. not expecting james to be her fiance! wow . . . |
| ophelia 2007-09-24 ch 29, anon. | abuseshe did not live happily ever after..lol..thats just soo sad..to kill him off like dat...(but good writing) even though it made me cry.. |
| CrimsonSentry 2007-08-27 ch 10, | abuseIn this chapter you refer to her as Eleanor and Amelia at the same time. ? |
| akaCHEEKS 2007-08-23 ch 1, | abusenice little story |