What was this essay about? It seems more like a short story. There's quite a bit of repetition here as well...maybe you should put up the final draft instead; I don't (and probably the same with other reviewers) don't want to criticize a first draft.

I found this short story extremely touching, and I like your comparison of Ester's life to an old, soundless movie. It is very emotionally-packed and descriptive. I hope you got a good grade for this. ^^

haha, if i recall properly, I m one of the people who were stealing your essay...>.<

Gosh...good piece of writing. Is it any wonder you're always beating me at essay writing? >.< Oh well...

Overall...great job done, esp the descriptive part...but (I know I've mentioned this to you before) it's kind of 'no climax'...so, u can work on that a little! :D Keep going!

my dear fren u are fabulous. =) i love e way u use descriptive stuf. once im out of inspiration, thats it. haha..where u get all these from? cool mind uv got up there..alongside with e nose,backview and cheeks. haha. *random* neways..keep tt writing light ablaze! ps..tts wat my name means.