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Inherent 2005-03-12 . chapter 1
die die die LJ die! I like this... ignore me.
K. Francesco 2005-03-11 . chapter 1
This somehow reminds me of those Japanese/Chinese paintings with the few lines of inspiration written in kanji. However, you have some grammatical mistakes which distract from the overall. As it is so short, simple things such as that might ruin it. (Number one being the 'that' right after the first two words)
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