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| Kurosaki Mizuki 2008-11-27 ch 1,   | i can't even begin to tell you how i feel right now. i know that i don't know who you are, and you don't know who i am either, but idk... this story describes my life so perfectly right now that i think i'm going to cry. (a little dramatic, i know) but seriously, i want to thank you. i love this. keep writing. |
| -cloudyday 2008-09-22 ch 1, | I loved it. It sounds so endearingly familiar, and it was very well written. But did you have to make her so hopeless? :(. |
| notwithoutyou 2008-09-16 ch 1, | Simple and sad. It'd be cool to hear more about them I guess (: |
| righthere431 2008-08-07 ch 1, | that sucks for the girl =/ |
| stunninglyaverage 2008-07-20 ch 1, | Ohh, that's so sad. A lot of people can relate, I'm sure. |
| E.Maginitive 2008-07-15 ch 1, | Aw...I was kinda hoping there would be more... Oh well. It was still really good. *favorites it* ^_^ |
| Lily Llynn 2008-06-19 ch 1, | Only one thing that bothered me: "feed his mom lies about why he doesn’t come home nights." I think you're missing an "at" between "home" and "nights." I wouldn't say it makes me feel fuzzy inside (because that only happens with fluffy things), but it does make me a little jealous. (: It's awesome writing and a depressing but awesome oneshot. (: I'm glad xoxluurve added it to our c2. (: |
| a.b.c. 2008-06-17 ch 1, | I really really like this. I am sick and tired of cliches and pure fluff(though they must be fun to write); this was a welcome break for me. Well done! |
| dragons moon angel 2008-06-17 ch 1, | you should try making it longer, maybe like she leaves him to try and see if he would notice... and yea |
| Let Them Eat Cake 2008-06-16 ch 1, | Well, I won't tell you it makes me fuzzy inside like it did for you, Elle (can I call you that? If not, just slap me with a dead fish). But I did like. It was sad, but sadly true in some ways at the same. Why do guys go for whores? Very good! Great job! =D Kay (Let Them Eat Cake) |
| katie valentine 2008-06-16 ch 1, | its awesome. XD |
| x3life 2008-06-15 ch 1, | omgg this was so good!! but depressing =( |
| Zonne 2008-06-15 ch 1, | I like this one shot. I like the way you work through her emotions and express how faithful she is to him in spite of it all. You did a good job crafting her feelings. I think the tense it was written in was somewhat distracting, though it worked. It was different, referring to her as "you". Very interesting story and way to write it. Zonne the review marathon link in my profile |
| White Rose Blossom 2008-06-15 ch 1, | Aww, that was sad, but really well written. Love the ending :) -Aria |
| Camelia Sinensis 2008-06-15 ch 1, | That was quite good, man. Congrats! |