Rather choppy, imho.

I know how you feel. Well written.

M...very touching. I can definately relate to some things you touched upon inthis poem. Good job!

aww, dont give up on the future! but good poem...u wanna review mine now? *wink wink*

A little bit repetative but you have a good thing here. I like the feel of the poem maybe try to do a little more with the time thing, I really like it!