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paputsza 2008-02-19 ch 5,	le fashonista says "pink schoolgirl skirts with blue high heels are bad" It looks very streetwalker-like. (what my caucasian, overweight male, forty year old, republican teacher tends to call hispanic females *-.-) But a guy with pink/ginger hair in a pink skirt, tank top and blue high heels is a bit strange. The clashing! redheads don't wear pink. And I love this story. It's the first time i've not wanted to skip over the flashbacks, with the deaths and everything. It actually matters to the actual plot. It's very cute.
paputsza 2008-02-19 ch 2,	he's like the muse of apathy. He just wants things to stay
Starlite nightfall:MOO MOO 2006-11-28 ch 18,	T_T :death: This is MAGNIFICENT! I love you so much for writing this it's so fascinating and...UBER cool! I love the characters and the plot and I didn't even realize why Kieran's throat was messed up until he saw his sister's "ghost" that night. It as from the CAR accident RIGHT? -late- BLOOD DRIPPING DOWN HIS NECK, DUH! lol okay k, sorry that little bit was bugging me. Anywho, this is really great and I can't wait for an update. So please...UPDATE SOON!... ^_^ Ja ne M3
trouble-makerz-4ever 2006-10-26 ch 18,	interesting. i wonder what will happen next? ~Jynx~
trouble-makerz-4ever 2006-09-27 ch 17,	i love that song! good chapter. u finally updated! Yay! ~Jynx~
trouble-makerz-4ever 2006-07-23 ch 16,	Jynx: O.O wow.
visodyssey 2006-04-29 ch 16,	Chapter 15: Okay - I have to comment on some truly classic stuff which I have noted here: "With every step that I took I expected something to happen." - I know you're a games player, rainbowskye so I'm guessing this is inspired by moments from things like Resident Evil, Quake, HL etc... wholeheartedly approves "preternatural" - what a great word! I shall have to try and get that into a post just for the excellence of the term. Ha! I KNEW Evelyn was evil! But that with Mr Krouse - didn't see that coming, but now you've explained to me about the eyes... a VERY well executed linkage there. Nice developments, and I imagine more of these will be to come with the loss of special ability that took place here. So... I look forward to more! And I'll try to review more timely-ly now I'm up to date. grins
visodyssey 2006-04-29 ch 15,	Chapter 14: I'm liking the idea of using blood to locate Kieren, and the creation of a portal using the same methodology. I can't help thinking that this mixture of blood and the magical fluid could later be reused to some evil purpose, mind... Writing was once again of a good quality and the chapter was enjoyable. looks forward to more
visodyssey 2006-04-29 ch 14,	Chapter 13: An interesting development, well more than one actually, for Kieren this chapter. Oh yeah, side note about the previous chapter - I still think Evelyn's evil and thus maybe it was him, under some kind of transformation or cloak, that had him looking like Sophia here. It certainly wasn't what I was expecting and was inded nicely done. Also, particularly liked this line: "Of course nobody would be able to see me since I used the shadows effectively." Onward!
visodyssey 2006-04-29 ch 13,	Chapter 12: First out, I like the candidness of this chapter; the blatancy of it is refreshing and fun. I like that. The scenes involving Kieren/Michael's antics are cool, although maybe slightly too strong in terms of a character change based on previous chapters; however, I don't necessarily think this is true since everyone lets their hair down sometimes, so either way... I liked it. Interesting development in the family - this will certainly add a dimension to the relationship of the two protagonists. Overall, nice work and I look forward to reading more. :)
visodyssey 2006-04-29 ch 12,	Chapter 11: An interesting treatise on both the subject of disability and on romance. I think that both elements have been treated well in this chapter. Also, some nice real-life-ness in the way he dooms himself not to sleep - the whole idea of 'once you believe you won't sleep, you won't'. Very true. Also, it's nice and easy to pick up again after a long hiatus (it's been too long since I last reviewed this) so that was good too. Writing was good as always and I didn't see any errors. Two very enthusiastic thumbs-up. Fine holiday fun. ;)
Jayn 2006-04-28 ch 16,	Aww! I want them to be okay! Will he get his powers back? Please update!
Jayn 2006-04-19 ch 15,	I like the story so far. Poor Michael and Kieren. Please update!
Violent Pornography 2006-04-19 ch 15,	Incredible story I love it. Damn I thought Evelyn sounded so cool... but Keiren is just adorable. hehe so cute.
SatisfyAnEmptyInside 2005-08-30 ch 11,	It’s obvious that Evelyn isn’t as innocent as he’s trying to seem (you can tell just from the scene in chapter…5, I think it is) but I can’t dislike him all too much when he’s being cute, you know? Lol. He’s very…bubbly and not evil-like, so even if he is I can’t see him like that unless he is /being/ evil. Grr at him for that. Aww, another kiss. Always adorable when it ends in blushing. (random: I love Fruits Basket, so I love that they’re watching it, even if it is hella girly…) Lee…gah, that boy just doesn’t know when to stop. Oh, I wish Oliver (who is so cute) ends up telling Lee how he feels. I just want to know what ends up happening. Heh. Hope you guys continue soon. lovelove

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