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| Wena61 2006-07-21 ch 10,  | abuseI can't believe niether Alecaen or Satyne have realised/told each other how they feel yet. Can't wait to read the next chapter. |
| FireBringer 2006-06-14 ch 10, | abuseFantastic. The characters are well eveloped, and the plot is slowly weaving its magic. Well done. |
| Aria Deloncray 2006-04-27 ch 10, | abuseGreat chapter! Please don't make Satyne marry the Count! Can't wait for the next chapter. |
| BlackStaticWolf 2006-04-19 ch 9, | abuseOverall I like the story so far. You've done a good job of giving Alecaen and Satyne personality by playing them off of each other. A couple things could be improved. During the longer dialogues, I found myself getting confused as to who was speaking and having to reread the conversation a couple times. It might help if you added a few more cues outside of the dialogue... like "Alecaen said." The other thing I noticed is that a couple times you refer to Alecaen's voice as "sexy." I think this is an area where you should "show don't tell." How is his voice sexy? What effects does it actually sound like? What is Satyn's reaction to his voice? The story is good, and the hints you've dropped about Alecaen's past do a good job of making the reader interested in him. The plot is interesting and fairly engaging. |
| Aria Deloncray 2006-04-19 ch 9, | abuseHmm...what's going to happen? Can't wait for the next chapter. |
| Aria Deloncray 2006-04-18 ch 8, | abuseGreat chapter. Is Satyne going to feel guilty for what she said to Mab? |
| Aria Deloncray 2006-04-06 ch 7, | abuseGreat chapter! |
| Aria Deloncray 2006-03-09 ch 6, | abuseI love this story! Please update soon. |
| wena61 2006-02-06 ch 6, anon. | abusePlease carry this on I love it and can't wait to read more!! |
| Wena61 2005-12-01 ch 2, anon. | abuseThe story is really good so far, can't wait to see how is pans out. |
| Blah246 2005-03-11 ch 1, | abuseHAhaha, i like this fellow, this is really good. i wonder whos the one he can't kill. another assasin perhapes? lolz, i can't wait to see where u take this, i look forward to ur future updates. |
| LeftoverDreams 2005-03-11 ch 1, | abuseThe ending of this was a very clear picture in my mind. Very well written! I await for more if you have it. |
| Rebecca Price 2005-03-11 ch 1, | abuseBeautifully done- I’m really looking forward to the rest. I think there were one or two grammatical errors- for instance you used ‘his’ where I think you meant ‘he,’ but the beginning caught my interest, and the proceedings held it. Thanks for taking the time to write. |
| Islandbreeze 2005-03-11 ch 1, | abuseThis is really good so far, nice flow. The ending of this chapter was great, and Alecaen does seem like a really good character. Great work! |
| diviniti 2005-03-11 ch 1, anon. | abuseOH sexy sexy sexy |