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| Margot Tenenbaum 2007-07-25 ch 1,  | abuseThis is hauntingly beautiful. I love the combination of words and phrases. It's charged with emotion. |
| Plinky 2005-11-13 ch 1, | abuseBeautiful. Absolutely beautiful. Nothing else to say. |
| addie pray 2005-08-16 ch 1, | abuseThis is so beautiful. Flows lovely-like. Builds up to the finish wonderfully, the last line was stunning. |
| citrus scented 2005-06-17 ch 1, | abusefantastic, a beautiful collection of images and chilling descriptions. you really build up the lola so vividly. very powerful stuff. |
| Sarah-Brighteyes 2005-06-05 ch 1, | abuseI love the image you painted in my mind. A sort of black and white woman whose mind is all in red. Lovely imagery and the metphors that i picked up through my own interpretation, at times can fit into my own life. I enjoy being able to relate to a piece, makes me think someone is writing to connect. Nice job. It was interesting and the flow worked. |
| smile persephone 2005-05-01 ch 1, | abuseI would have categorized this as poetry, but I suppose this is suitable (it is your writing after all). I really love this. There's so much quotable stuff and I just can't pick one! I just adore the first sentence! Lovely, lovely. |
| Komodai 2005-04-05 ch 1, anon. | abuseI suggest you break it up some and work on the syntax; give some lines more flow. That minor suggestion aside.. I like what you have here. "iron and wine," I dig it. The person here feels unique and specific, yet a type that everyone knows. |
| Kat 2005-04-02 ch 1, anon. | abuseI just don't know what to say... I like this very much. I'd copy and paste my favorite lines, to show you, but it would be almost the entire thing. |
| katmonkey 2005-03-12 ch 1, | abuseWow, amazingly powerful ending. |
| hmmmmm 2005-03-12 ch 1, | abusei'm in love with the last line even more than i love the rest. |
| and flowers 2005-03-11 ch 1, | abusethe ending sums it rather rather bluntly, doesn't it? actually, to be honest, i think this lola might be you. hm. still, as always, i liked it. and i feel honored that you want to "write like me", though i think you do it with better description and better words.i love you. ... |
| Kissy Kitty 2005-03-11 ch 1, | abuseI really like the feel and flow of this--it came across so well. I'm becomming a fast fan of anything you do. ;3 Thanks for your great reviews! To answer your questions, the girl in "Ice Winsome" is twenty-two. I've just uploaded two more pieces--I'd love for you to check 'em out! |