i really enjoyed reading this. great poem, greatER poet!

SP

this is unique. I've never heard of something like this before. but very good. Thank you for the review.

Sorrow

For some reason I really liked this, though I do not think I have a clue what's going on... Confusing, but entertaining. To me, that qualifies as a great job... Karma Chameleon

Confusing, what with such a strong start but there was an impulse driving this poem on that made it highly dramatic. I also liked the line in brackets, left you in a moment of expectation (or bathos :)

interesting structure, love the ending x weasel within x

very good. I liked how it was sorta two people (or two sides of one person) it was very good. :-)