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| for keeps 2008-02-21 ch 1,  | abuseThis is very old again, but that doesn't make it any less deserving of a review! I think this is adorable and paints such an eccentric, goofy picture in the mind. But that makes it good! |
| S. JayFinch 2007-07-19 ch 1, | abuseThe story wasn't to my liking, especially the fairy, if it had been a transvestite fairy, I would have really enjoyed it, but the whole pixie-type business, OF COURSE HE'S MAD HE'S TALKING TO FAIRIES! But that's unimportant, it's very well-written and well-constructed, I liked the line abour wrinkling his nose, very nice. |
| Simply-Crazy 2006-05-02 ch 1, | abuseI think the word that describes this best is "cute." I know, that's probably not what most authors want to hear, but judging by some of your other work, I think "cute" is what you intended this to be, is it not? Just a sweet and crazy picture to paint in people's mind. Well, if I'm right (and I hate being wrong), then you did your job well! |
| Insanity Da Best Policy 2005-11-07 ch 1, | abusew00t! That was awesome! Very funny. Insane even. Um, wait, itz insane! Hehe. Nice poem! And ... ahem, dreaming about fairies was just the touch required to complete the insane picture! *rolls on the floor laughing* Janet. |
| Miss-Guppy 2005-06-21 ch 1, | abuseLol! Bravo, chickee, bravo! Fly fairy, fly, Amu's family is crayzee! |
| Shattered-Lives 2005-04-02 ch 1, | abuseThat was awesome!! |
| grim-dreamer 2005-03-12 ch 1, | abuseA madness within a madness within a madness, this one! Written well, though in some places the poem seems forced. |
| arachibutyrophobia 2005-03-12 ch 1, | abuseVery cute!reminds me of my fam. well, maybe just my little bro, but whatever...two things: U wrote, "How it is my laughter took that tone," It would flow better if u just wrote, "How my laughter took that tone," and the line, "“I was just surprised, I rather suppose." would sound better like "“I was just rather surprised, I suppose." or something like that. but great idea, and very good flow/rhyming! ~birdytamel~ |
| Blueangel82277 2005-03-12 ch 1, anon. | abuseI really liked your poem. I thought it was funny. Good job, keep on writing please. |
| darkaura de shadow 2005-03-12 ch 1, | abuselol i love it! sounds like my family...great poem,keep writing |