Lostbutloved
2005-03-12
ch 1,   | Very...acurate, You really do show your love and respect for Jesus through this peice. Although it isnt timlinicly (not a word but whatever) correct it does show the most important parts. The beggining stanzas metaphors were really well done and put my in my "metaphorical bliss" state. THe only thing I saw was the little note to Daniel, when you do do a authors note it is polite to put a break in. Also, authors notes should be written to fill in any balnks. That is thing only thing I saw in it that could have been considerd incorrect. I really like this poem you and daniel did a good job.~LostbutlovedPS: The note to daniel could of also been done in the "summary" section. |
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