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| chibibble 2008-05-03 ch 1,   | I really enjoyed this oneshot. You also used second person, which is barely ever taken out of the closet for writing...and it was refreshing. You've made everything terrifyingly real in a way that I can't quite explain. The bit I loved most was the ending; with the picture frames that aren't empty and the milk-tasting. God, I love you, you've done everything perfectly: the interjections by Jordan ("Flowers.", "Twenty.", "Canada.") to fill in the gaps. What I like about Callum is the way he's direct ("Move", "Take the bag.") because you've really built him up as a character in this fairly short oneshot. You should get this beta'd (I wouldn't mind doing it) or check it, I think...because you've done quite a lot of 'you mother'. ...I look forward to reading more from you. |
| Lovedward48 2008-02-24 ch 1, | YAY! Awesome! I love it!XD Jordan is cool and Callum seems to have a heart after all!XP |
| Isidris Gry 2008-02-10 ch 1, | I love poppy seed muffins and God Callum was a bastard. He does a good job making it up, and I wish I could see how he gets around to tasting the dried paint on Jordan's fingers. lol. I like the way you wrote this. |
| Kidiu Anaji 2007-06-10 ch 1, | Man, Callum's such a jerk at the beginning. But, since made up for it in the end, I forgive him!...Poor Jordan! |
| magalina 2007-05-02 ch 1, | cutecutecute so very cute XD |
| lapidary 2006-04-15 ch 1, | short and sweet :] |
| Jivi 2005-10-19 ch 1, | Wow, that was awesome!!When I was reading it I forgot that it was a oneshot and then when I got to the bottom I was all sad and stuff!!:( |
| Yoyo-chan 2005-10-11 ch 1, | *reviews!* Cute. I love everything you write ^_^. You didn't stop writing completely, right? Just on fp.com? |
| pneumothorax 2005-09-04 ch 1, | I liked this. His personality was winning. 'and you somehow find yourself tasting the dried paint on his fingertips.' Interesting line, of many. |
| doragon41 2005-08-06 ch 1, | *tear* only one chapter! curse one-shots! |
| Solitudity 2005-08-06 ch 1, | Good story. I loved the ending. |
| Logical and serene megadeat... 2005-07-18 ch 1, | IT was sweet in a way |
| chinotto 2005-05-15 ch 1, | aww. it's cute! do you think you'll be continuing this fic?~ *drool* sorry. that happens sometimes. it's really cute though~! |
| Amour Amorita Saphira 2005-05-07 ch 1, | wow.. emm.. wow.. i mean,dat guys really emotional but it's nice hehe^^ i like that paring^^ emm if u can.. can u continue it?^^ like it lots^^ tata great job^^ |
| Yaoi-Sonata 2005-03-27 ch 1, | aw cute. you write well. |