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| Shyanne Kai 2005-03-13 ch 1,  | abusewow, this is amazing. Beautifully written. Defiantly adding it to my favourites. "but was cradled lovingly in dripping hands. The liquid stopped its flow, and dripped lazily." Maybe you should use a different verb for 'dripped.' So not to repeat yourself withwords close together. Unless it's for effect. |