|Reviews for Lovers' Tiff|
| TrueToMyself 3/14/05 . chapter 1
Marvelous! I love how you portray the guilt, and the bitterness at being patronized. Also, the conversational tone really adds something, and I can almost picture him(her?) shouting the capitalized words. One suggestion: Maybe you could break up the first stanza into "Why don't you just take me in?/Pull me up to the wall/and gun me down?" JUST AN IDEA, because it seemed to run-on.
Excuse my long, babbling review; I usually get carried away. By the way, can you check out one (or more?) of my poems?
| Made in U.S.A 3/14/05 . chapter 1
i love the guilt and how you write of it. again just perfect. keep writing :D
| this is britt 3/13/05 . chapter 1
the desperation breaks my heart.