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| OnyxDawn 2005-04-03 ch 1,   | Whoa...creepy. *shivers* You're a good writer, but I think the first few sentences were just a bit choppy...they didn't really flow that well with the rest of the story. But I like it. |
| Mary Spring 2005-03-21 ch 1, | this is rather freaky.. and the poems were nice and creepy... there was only one error.. quote: "Her parents searched the house far and wide, but to no avail" how can they search the house "far and wide"? the house is an enclosed space... otherwise, this story was great! XD |
| Rachal92 2005-03-16 ch 1, | Wow, it is so intersting! So, Sasha is really a witch? Will you make a squeal? |
| JULZ 2005-03-15 ch 1, | this is a little too...chucky-ish for my taste. freaky living dolls creep me out. and so do semi-dead children. like the girl in the ring. |
| Sami 2005-03-13 ch 1, | Whoa, scary! It's like that "Seven Dolls" scary story, sort of. |
| slave to the voices 2005-03-13 ch 1, | Cute little short. I think you could have done more with the ending, but that's just my opinion. Anyway, nice work, keep writing. **Slave** |