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| Islandbreeze 2005-10-07 ch 1, | The description in this is great, and it is a very interesting piece. "Someone had laughed on the swing. someone who had not laughed very much in her laugh."- 'very much in her life'? This has a nice tone and feel to it, and it flows well with what your trying to describe I think. Good job |
| sweetxinsincerity 2005-03-13 ch 1, | WOW!! this is really really good!! it's great!! i luv it so much!! i felt as if i was there, watching that girl on the swing. this made me happy just reading it :). i'm glad she smiled. lol. great job, as always!! i'm finally adding u to my author alert cuz i kept forgetting 2! yay! keep on writing!! u should write some more short story stuff like this. |
| Lia Silverfrond 2005-03-13 ch 1, | beautiful and so in depth... so pretty... keep writing things like this. |