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| HermitInMyOwnHead 2005-06-07 ch 1,   | thought-provoking and points proven, though i don't agree with them all. cool poem.have a nice day |
| and flowers 2005-04-28 ch 1, | let me say that the second and third stanzas voiced what i never really thought of. it makes sense. |
| ihdreniel 2005-04-22 ch 1, | keep up the good work! loved it! :D your poetry has a lot of heart. |
| darkmistresslae 2005-04-02 ch 1, | All in all it was a pretty good poem. You got across how you felt very well, and I could see where you were coming from. However, at times it seemed less poetic and more essayish. Phrasing words correctly, especially in poetry, is so important to make it really dig deep into the reader's soul and make them *feel* all the emotions. The paper is a canvas, the *world* is a canvas, and the words are simply paints. If put together in the right way they can be moving and wonderful. And when you can do that emotion can come across so much clearer and everything is, in general, so much more entertaining to read. Don't take me wrong. This is definatly NOT flame, this was a great start to what, I believe, could be an excellent poem. And these are only suggestions. Sorry if it sounds harsh, I'm not trying to be. Thanks for the reviews too by the way! --HTD-- |