Well, this time is a planned review. No randomosity here.

Aside from being filmed in a sort of tacky, pretentious patina derived from teenage opinions, I'd say this is pretty good. Good metaphors, although slightly stale. The one problem I have with all of your stuff is it's formality. You're extremely formal. Although the style is pretty... cool, spunky, your choice of words is not. Try words with zest, gusto, zing, something. I think you'd grow from a totally contemporary mind-trip of a poem. Something with bite.

That was quite pretty, but the format made it seem cluttered to me.

I really, really liked the tears analogy, about how if they were light you could see, but they aren't... And how it pointed out how insignificant even diamonds are in the big picture.

Lovely.

I think it definitely flows better as a single paragraph. I also think it adds to the shortness of it, making the ending seem abrupt. Love it, especially this line: "Good and evil do not exist in this merry-go-round of the happy-sad."

Beautiful. Keep it up. ^_^

very good. i like the wording a lot. i think it would be easier to read as a poem, but if u like it like that then thats ok. good job.