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| dasdasa 2005-03-14 ch 2, anon. | abuseWhy did you call it "The death of Raven"? |
| Celtiar 2005-03-14 ch 1,  | abuseBeautiful. Absolutely beautiful. As for your title, it's divine. I could really feel what the main character was feeling. The overall mood is desolate, but it has power. I liked the fact that your tone was not too emotional. Sadness is much deeper and real when it's restrained. 'Never again would I deny myself love, or happiness', '...my breath froze within my chest' are some of the expressions that I appreciated the most. I envy you. You have gift. Please, please continue. I really want to know what happens next. Give us Hope. Regards from the Teltarian Riders. |