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| a beginner 2008-06-12 ch 6,  | abusecool, ur an amazing writer... come on update plz |
| Isa Koliki 2005-09-19 ch 6, | abuseBut what significance would her name have to Julia? Hm. I wonder if she knows it somehow? And I'm interested to see how Corel's going to fit into everything... another problem for poor Rena, I'm guessing. Update soon! |
| arachibutyrophobia 2005-08-17 ch 6, | abuseCorel. i mean, perhaps she'll acidentally help her, but chances are everythings going to be even more of a mess. please update soon! |
| miss-blackhair 2005-07-19 ch 6, | abusepretty intense in a way.. i enjoyed.. =) |
| Wolfie Star26 2005-07-18 ch 6, | abuseI've said it before nad i'll say it again. You are a way better author then I'll ever be. Anyway, great job on this. I enjoyed reading this chapter and i can't wait for more from you. |
| Isa Koliki 2005-07-04 ch 5, | abuseGood chapter. Aww, poor Rena. Maybe Julia will save her? I hope so, I want her to shoot Crash with one her her WW2 guns. ^_^ ~Isa~ |
| MyParentsForgot2NameMe 2005-06-27 ch 5, anon. | abuseYOU ROCK MY SOCKS IN A BOX WITH A FREAKING FOX WHO WEARS YELLOW SMOCKS AND TALKS TO CROCS!(h e l l ya baby!) no im serious this is the most awesomeist story like EVER) |
| birdytamel 2005-06-26 ch 5, anon. | abuse::snaps fingers:: darn! And she was so close to getting away! hey, maybe there's still hope... ::bright smile:: or not. because i doubt they'll underestimate her... sorry 4 the short review, fireworks just started... |
| Wolfie Star26 2005-06-26 ch 5, | abuse"but he had to admit. This girl was ten times more precarious than the rest." umm, grammar issue, I'm surpirsed I never see stuff like this in your work. I should probably explain, the period after admit it should be a comma and the 't' in this should be lowercase. other then that this chapter was awesome. But then again your stories are always aweosme, at least the ones i read. please update soon. |
| idon'thaveaname 2005-06-24 ch 4, anon. | abusethis is so awesome that I think I'm going to go out and scream out at the world that you are an awesome writer and have the most vivid and insightful imagination on this planet(and on every other planet at that)! THIS IS SO AWESOME THAT IF YOU DONT MAKE IT INTO A NOVEL...I WILL PERSONALLY HUNT YOU DOWN, SAW YOUR HEAD OFF WITH A CHAINSAW, CHEW OFF YOUR FINGERS/TOES, AND STAB YOUR BODY A THOUSAND TIMES! but really, you should serious make this into a book and sell it. IT'LL BE BIGGER THAN HARRY POTTER!(if you call harry potter really big that is) |
| SendinOut-a-SOS 2005-06-09 ch 4, | abuseFirst off, I enjoy your story but what I was wondering is why you picked Detroit as your setting...I wonder. |
| Wolfie Star26 2005-06-07 ch 4, | abuseI'm seriously sitting on the edge of my seat. You had to elave us off like that. You know I totally forgot about checking up on this story after like the first two weeks of may. But now that you have moe chapters I hope the next one comes a little sooner-ish. I'm in a strange mood right now. Just update soon. |
| Dragonmount 2005-06-04 ch 4, | abuseVery good story. Hope for updates soon. |
| Isa Koliki 2005-06-02 ch 4, | abuseWell, the police are gonna have one hell of a job finding Rena if she's 4 centuries in the future, that's all I can say. Good chapter. I wonder if Crash's feeling is right, and he knows where Rena is...? Also, if he thinks Rena could be dead, then maybe the antique shop is dangerous in some way... *frowns in thought* Hey, you better get the next chapter up, because a lot of thinking gives me migraines. ^_^ ~Isa Koliki~ |
| birdytamel 2005-06-01 ch 4, anon. | abusefinally i get to read this! It sux, last day of school is the 28th, so urg. i have all that awful last minite work to do... ok. enough about that, and back to the chapter...er. I think when you say, "Well, it's name has changed" no ' is needed. but i suck at grammar, so... "Being dumbfound, she slumped..." um, "utterly dumbfounded"? "Yes, she did. Apparently, she managed to pull a stunt over Crash and fled as soon as she got the opportunity." ha. haha. sux for him! "Alright, alright.. She is with Juliana.. " *smacks ramirez* stupid man. Gr. RAT! and still alive? whats with julia? weird. "It's my housemate, Rena Avery. She has been kidnapped.. " mua. um, thats nice and all, but i doubt its c=gonna do much good... so. yes. update ^^ |