| Reviews for I Tuck My Bangs On The Back Of My Ear |
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I Guess I'm Dreaming Again 10/11/07 . chapter 1Hm I love your titles haven't read enough yet though i'm in school and usually can't finish anything! BUT no worries I will! I promise and i will submit more reviews |
kayla213 11/3/06 . chapter 1Wow. This poem is just...oh wow. This poems just voices my everyday pain. Except, I dont have bangs...only just little wisps of hair that fall out of my ponytail. This poem is one of the best. I love it. Kayla. -writing sins and tragedy's for a living. |
the.pink.life 6/23/06 . chapter 1Well, first the little grammatical details - I wouldn't say "on" the back of your ear...probably "behind your ear" would be better; in the last stanza, the 4th line starts with "were" and it should be "we're." Small, yes, but adds credibility when things are correct. That said, I think you should retitle the poem, and I didn't care for the line "Duh, as if you see me!" The "duh" took the maturity out of the poem. And also, at the end, I'd get rid of the exclamation points with the questions marks. (Keep the question marks, but the exclamation points make this more immature, as well.) Keep writing! :) |
nofaceme 4/12/06 . chapter 1Very common topic, but a unique approach. I liked the whole idea of the hair thing..just works for me I guess. Keep it up! |
sunshineofyourlife 3/20/06 . chapter 1again, right on the nail. :D your work never ceases to make me smile! -sunshine |
ThisisWhereIComeIn 11/26/05 . chapter 1I can relate, and this is really good. thanx 4 the review, btw, I appreciate it. SFF |
method acting 8/16/05 . chapter 1Overused topic, but real none the less. There is a truthfullness...a naive aspect that makes is excellent. Lovely job. |
peekaboobunnyluvr101 7/29/05 . chapter 1wow! ya know i kinda feel like this sometimes! This is really good! I can't wait to read more of your works! |
First Day 6/24/05 . chapter 1I can definitely relate...I hate it when the person you love won't even so much as look at you much less than talk to you. It's very aggravating! Anyways, great poem. Nice emotion! Keep up the good work!P.S. Thanks for the reviews! |
neath the willows 6/9/05 . chapter 1i like this one. ikno the feeling. tis would make a good song i think! but dont take my word i hav no musical talent wutsoever.-BoB |
estrela 5/19/05 . chapter 1oh wow... i completely relate to this. it's really frustrating! :) i like it. |
Sheila Ibre 3/26/05 . chapter 1Interesting. Hmm... best part about this is its realism. Most poets tend to use metaphor like toilet paper. (hehe...me included) |
linedstained frameless 3/19/05 . chapter 1no one could've said it better than you..i can relate..duh...pa review ha..*MWAH* |
Marlon J. Locsin 3/17/05 . chapter 1good narrative poem and a slice of real life you could make a story out of this though... keep writing... |
lalalalalla 3/15/05 . chapter 1I was emotionally dragged by what I just read and you know why? I can truly relate..I almost had this utmost feeling that you wrote this poem because of someone close to you...like a dedication or something...but i guess it was only my imagination...I always expected all your works to be magnificent...just as always...simply love it...-demented ice |