Wow, this was brilliant. I tend to avoid anything with an "Angst" label, but even I'm still utterly satisfied with this. Thank you for sharing it with us!

(I really hope this gets through to you (as in actually posted) and FP both love to spaz on me. XD )

I really liked this one-shot because it was very developed for a one-shot. A lot of times people will start one but it won't really be finished and they won't make the end seem final. I loved the ending where it says "At his high school reunion, Chad punched Jake and broke his nose." that part made me laugh. And I read down at the bottom of your one-shot that you didn't give your main character a name, and that's okay, I actually think that in this case naming your character would take away from the character's value. Because a name can tell a story and when you hear a name you automatically get a visual of what you percieve the person to be like, by not naming the character you draw attention to his story and his emotions.

YAY!! Another adorable story!!

I loved this!

The writing was brilliant and I'm off to read more of your stuff!

the time spent on reading this was worth it.
aw...

well that was seriously worth the 10 minutes i spent reading it :)

I liked this One-shot even if I thought in the beginning that the main character was mute... And it would have been cool also... But he's not and the story is good.Even if I'm not really into the crying part ^^".

i like the ending..~~the best part..!! 'At his high school reunion, Chad punched Jake and broke his nose.'...priceless!!...but i think its all a misunderstanding no?...so kinda should confront Jake but he just make his life more miserable by having sex and all that...

Good thing, not naming the main character. The only way you would've been able to sneak it in would've been if you'd had te character call him that. You didn't need thousands of words to tell the story.

Aw, how sweet. ^^ Adorable, really. I love Chad, he just seems so cute. Haha. And yeah, I didn't realize until I read your notes that you really didn't have a name for the main character. It's all right though ... Great job. I love it.

Aw . . . that was cute. The ending made me laugh, "At his high school reunion, Chad punched Jake and broke his nose. They lived happily ever after." Jake deserved it. :)

I like the style of this . . . how you left off most names until close to the end and never named the main character. It gave it more of a personal feel, like you're really seeing it from his view. After all, how many times do you actually think about yourself using your own name?

The only complaint I have is the main character's reaction to breaking up with Jake (whom you called "Jack" halfway through). It seems a little . . . well, extreme. But it fit with the story, so I guess it works.

Great story, good luck with future writing!
FreeDaChickens

"At his high school reunion, Chad punched Jake and broke his nose."
That line had me cracking up. I really enjoyed this, made my night it did. Almost had me tearing up. Just a little though.

I am lazy. I also do not read stories more than once, certainly not five or six times in a two week period, first on your livejournal, and then here. I therefore have decided to overcome my natural state of indolence and bloody well review.

So. I liked this. A lot. A whole heap. Positively, absolutely, forever and always. I didn't like the reason the main character gave for basically becoming a one night stand in the first place, I thought it was a bit slight(people get left all the time by bastards and don't start sleeping around), but I sure as hell loved the developement of his love story with Chad. That was believable, and triggered all sorts of warm and fuzzy feelings as main character found himself returning to his green-eyed lover, and found that the caring sex offered by this person made him feel better about himself. I like that the developement of their love was a bit unusual, and not the same cliched stuff.
I love the fact that you didn't the main character, it made it more intimate somehow to me. (Don't ask why. I don't know.)And I adore the fact that Chad punched Jake out at their high school reunion.
Finally, I love the style of writing. Somehow, it helped to conveyed the characters state of mind and towards the end the spare sentences just, I don't know. They just...captured me. This story captured my imagination. It made me wish I was friends with that couple, just to see the beauty that that relationship would be. Thank you so much for sharing your writing. I am very grateful.

Aw.

Whew! That was one fine story you had there!

Loved the short and straight-to-the-point style. It's always great to read stories that are there to be enjoyed, not as a chore to hack through.

And I'm glad you won't be writing a follow-up with this story. The ending was solid and left little else to wonder about: Chad and he-who-shall-not-be-named "lived happily ever after" - short, sweet and no convoluted **.

Again, awesome work!