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temblance 2007-01-03 ch 14,	Wow, you've completed this story! Good job with that--I /will/ get to the end eventually. One thing caught my attention: "What will I do when I have to stand, she wondered absurdly" because it is not italicized, it comes across as an abrupt pov change instead of a thought. I have to say I love how you write about politics, and the Council. It really sweeps me in, while I'm reading, and I appreciate how your story is more than a trypical fantasy plot. Keep it up! After I finish this, I will have to read some of your other stuff.
Gentle Agony 2006-09-16 ch 33,	I like this. I thought Rua would end up dying, I just wasn't sure how. I didn't think Hazeli would mourn so for An, but she has often surprised me. Anyway, I liked it.
Archipelago 2006-07-15 ch 33,	It ends. Oh my, that was so sad. It was her own execution? How cruel is that. It's been fun reading though. Very fun reading, Cerri.
temblance 2006-07-13 ch 13,	Wow. That was an intense last section of the chapter. It is interesting to see that Hazeli is standing up for her brother, as though she is torn between refusing him and loving him. once again, good characterization.
temblance 2006-07-13 ch 12,	Hopefully now that summer is here I will be able to read at a faster pace, but for this chapter: there is not too much criticism-wise to comment on; I enjoyed the interaction between An and Rua. I think your characterization is definitely a strong point in this story.
drakkarim 2006-06-10 ch 7,	whoa, whoa, WHOA! what happened exactly here? good chapter byt eh way and to answer ur review, read on
drakkarim 2006-06-10 ch 6,	teh fyd is a pervert, the fyd is a pervert. ah, interesting, but i can see that rua will get with teh fyd (yes thats what im gonna call him)
drakkarim 2006-06-10 ch 5,	thtas funny at teh end, but uh, do u think u mightve created a perfect society?
drakkarim 2006-06-10 ch 4,	damn, the barbarians sound so damn sexist and medieval, but tehn again they r barbarians, whatd u expect?
drakkarim 2006-04-11 ch 3,	the creation of so many characters complicates the story a little, but not too much. it's the story that counts, but u many want to explain a new character within the story 'cause that would help the story flowing. the story itself is good, except for that incest. keep up the good work!
Archipelago 2006-04-08 ch 31,	Interesting. That means An is now Contra right and I don't think they could execute him then, right? Rua is so crazy running into an enemy camp. I'm so waiting for her to die.
Archipelago 2006-04-08 ch 30,	Heya, this chapter was good. I get the feelin gthat Rua might do something crazy in the next chapter because it's that or let An die.
Gentle Agony 2005-12-29 ch 29,	Well... I have officially decided I don't really like Taln. Poor An, he is messy. I really liked it. I can't wait for the next one.
Archie 2005-12-01 ch 29,	I can't beleive I just submitted a review to the wrong story. I wasn't paying the lsightest bit of attention to it. I'm so embarassed weeps Well, I was going to put off reading this until I did my homework but I'll read it now and ask that you pretend that giant review I left is like invisible and I'll give you this review which will be like totally more ginormous than that one. You know, you took like 3 months to update...wait thats me and my stories I'm thinking about. Omigawd(this too is a real time review) An just killed an innocent child. That was so wrong. "His father used to tell him that if Wilis was a horse, he would have had more common sense." oh, oh, I don't have common sense. It's fun cuz I almost get hit by cars like 4 times a day(eventually I'll get flattened by a Ford F150) Rua was so obvious when she went and choked when he mentioned a prisoner so that means she's gonna have to kill him(An), right? Oh, Taln is such a terrible person he's going to turn Rua in and take Drien position. This chapter was like totally longer(i think) It was totally cool though. Update soon. And you have glanced at the chapter I sent you right? Anyway, bye!
Archipelago 2005-12-01 ch 29,	You changed your profile. I like it. So if Learah is your real name then you must have one of the most unique names ever. And you're a pisces, me too our birthdays are only 6 days apart(12th for me.) Omigawd its totally cool you told us too much about you. Anyway, this story sucks! lol just kidding, you should have seen your face. I like this (it isn't autobiographical is it?)oh I spotted an error(this is real time review writing whichg is why its so long 'cuz I can't keep on one thought without going on to another.) "GodI had loved mywhole life." You are missing a period? and the sentence before that and after it is uncommaed and missing spaces.The last sentence bothers me: shouldn't the tense of the verbs be the same(not present progressive[is that even a tense it is in spanish i know]) Well, I've ramble long enough so one last thing: Thx for putting me on the list of cool authors, you rule! And you know this could be updated but its a oneshot isn't it? Yes, that was more than one last thing. :)

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