I'm intrigued to know what else is going on. Why she's so different, why her dancing is different, what there is to her dancing. You should definitely continue it.

And such a strong idea is her hiding herself in the comfortable, afraid of being hurt, because it happens to everyone.

I love watching how your writing grows and changes over time.

Peace, hearts and cheers.

Jess

Beautiful writing carrie...recognize me? If you don't then I'm gonna run you over with my big blue monster truck or throw you in the whomping willow...*huggles* Tis Renee if you didn't, lol. EMAIL ME. WHErE HAVE YOU BEEN? starlitegurl2004@yahoo.com. ttyl lylas.

Wow...I'm lazy. Cannot be bothered to log in. Meh. Anyway, this is a good start. I look forward to seeing more development of her character and to see how she interacts with people. I think it'd be interesting to really see those different sides of her in action--you know, the shy, reserved, self-effacing side with other people, and then this confident side when she's alone. I think it's interesting, and I can't wait to see more! Keep writing, Carrie!

lookin good sis! Cant wait to see what happens next!

Sounds like a good start to me! I would love to see you develop the possibilities here. I admire your choice of personality for a main character - not necessarily that of one who stands out on first sight, but of one whose individuality is subtle and in need of nurture.

Please do check out my story and tell me what you think - and if you want to talk about anything writing-wise, feel free to email me. Hope to hear from you soon!