Reviews for The Story of How My Life Got So Upside Down

Reviews For: The Story of How My Life Got So Upside Down

Kawaii Panda-Chan 2006-08-11 ch 1,	abuseOkay, normally, I'd tell you things to help you write better, but guess what, everybody else already wrote all the issues down. Heh, I guess it saves me some typing...Anyways, this looks really, really, really...(continues on for an extremely, stupidly long time that Dragin is too lazy to type) AWESOME! Please Update Soon, Starlite-Dragin
Jessica Wright 2006-05-08 ch 1,	abuseNice. You have a few repeated phrases, but it's interesting all the same. Keep it up!
Holli-chan Stevens 2005-09-18 ch 1,	abuseWell! That was a great start. I like how you kept a conversational tone throughout the narrative, and the rebellious, tomboyish spirit you've given Belle is rather satisfying. You had a couple sentences that seemed a little rough, but a bit of proofreading will fix that right up. Looking for the second chappie! Toodles! --Holli!
bluewaves64 2005-09-18 ch 1,	abuseI liked the way you introduced the character (you) to the readers :) Keep writing!
ice flyer 2005-07-22 ch 1,	abuseinteresting plot idea. you have a lot of background, which is good. the writing was a little simple and awkwared, though, and i found a lot of sentences that made no sense. like.."My parents say I was a beautiful baby, but we all know how parents are biased and like I can remember." the "like i can remember" part is not very formal and it's not very good grammar either. also, you forget a lot of apostrophes and there are lots of fragments. i just suggest you edit this REALLY thoroughly. anyway, you introduced your character well. thanks for your reviews :)
Madrynea 2005-07-17 ch 1,	abuseI also once started a story about my life. Doesn't life always seem crazy when you think about all the things you've done? This is nicely written with a touch of humour, I like it!
Salt and Vinegar Pringles 2005-06-30 ch 1, anon.	abuseWow, this is really good! Very interesting lead into a story, I'd really enjoy reading more. Thanks for reviewing, and update soon!
Bookgirl2021 2005-06-27 ch 1,	abuseWell...one thing that was kind of annoying was spelling. Sorry, I'm really picky about spelling. It seems kind of interesting, though. Post some more.
Islandbreeze 2005-06-24 ch 1,	abuseA very nice beginning, watch out for 'their' versus 'there'. I like the narrative style, interesting first chapter. write more soon!
XxDragon Princess NikkixX 2005-06-22 ch 1,	abuseGreat start! Keep up the great work and be sure to update soon!
ecallers 2005-05-15 ch 1, anon.	abusegood. but as said by ann CHEAK UR SPELLING! an just a small Q. am i Alisa?
J. AnnLouise 2005-03-23 ch 1,	abuseIn your comments it's "while writing" not "well writing". In the 4th paragraph instead of "with way we have." try "with what we have." and "made many" not "made may" and "either" not "ether" and Clair "there youthful sprit" what's wrong - get the right 'their' please and again with the "there" it's "their". That's two of the same mistake.It's named not names and how do you have 5 kids your age if Veronica is 2 years older. Then in the last paragraph "on me" not "one me" and try "...and that I would...but they were wrong."Other than those mistakes I just pointed it was a good story. I guess I don't need to tell you to review our story. Keep up the good work.Jerica

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