Beautiful, simply beautiful. There are no words that I can say that illustrate the feelings I have for this poem, since it's so...so BRILLIANT. We can see the darkness and angst here. Good job. We can never do without angst, can we? *grins evilly* The couplets are a great thing to try out, and each time you experiment with a new type of poetry, it always comes out as nothing short of brilliance. Another well-written poem in your collection of beautiful poetry.

chibichocobo

O very nice and dark. I think the mini couplets worked wonders. The last couplet was a "bam in your face" set. I loved it. Great peice. Nice angst.

some very powerful lines you've used in this poem. (especially, the last two lines)great job. Looks like I have another person to compete with now...-ADD

sigh, another suicidal poem~~ i suppose it's a fairly emotional topic~~ well expressed anyways~!

keep writing!

YES! *high fives* I love it...you're goin on my faves list ^.^ Cause youre cool like that--Pammy--

hey sumiko! another poem eh? AND THIS ONE IN UR SLEEP?! XD...typical...tsk tsk, nah, jp! XD. anywayz, love it, everything just flows

Powerful, dark and painful. Well done, Sumi. Well done!!

!~* Noelle *~!