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| dawningfear 2005-03-17 ch 1,   | Instead of 'dampen' I think you mean 'dampened'. Elsewise the tense is off ^^ The line 'I die a little inside' is pretty clichéd. The word paperheart is interesting, however the idea of paper being broken is inconsistent. That being said, saying it is torn would be clichéd. In either case, there’s probably a more appropriate word. I know that you probably just posted this to vent. But if all writers did was go around smelling each others bums and telling each other that they smell like roses, literary work wouldn’t get very far ^^ keep writing |
| nick-wordsmith 2005-03-16 ch 1, | Nicely written and very well said. I can sort of relate- you put this well. Stones decay, words lastNick |