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| McKanzie Drestire 2006-12-04 ch 1, anon. | abuseWow dude From the stuff you submit in class, this is so serious and heartfelt. i love your fun poems, they're so funny, but you have this serious side too and it's great. I love the end and the line 'not half wedged in this wonderland' that's an amazing image, like being halfway in limbo. Brilliant, and example of people being two ways. Peace, McKenzie |
| UnknownLove 2005-04-07 ch 1,  | abusei wish that also |
| swtdreamz101 2005-03-30 ch 1, | abuseo...dark...but aren't we all little like this in the end? nice poem |
| faking closure 2005-03-25 ch 1, | abusePowerful. Choppy. Wonderful. Great. I like this. >>Naomi |
| Shigure-ami 2005-03-24 ch 1, | abuseHi-thank you for reviewing my poetry! Since you are friendly like that, I will review some of your work too. I like this poem, but it kinda confuses me. I thought i got the general gist of it after the fifth reading-anyway I only noticed one problem- breath should have and e on the end (breathe) unless you wanted the word brehth instead of breeth |
| uoyevoli 2005-03-20 ch 1, | abusewow. that's really...um...what's that word...ah! harsh. yeah. but what intrigues me is that i can read your poems, but your comments are hard as hell. |
| Sarah-Brighteyes 2005-03-20 ch 1, | abuseHm so harsh and yet so honest at the same time. I liked it. You seem to say what so many of us think about someone. Someone who dwells in our minds and hearts on good and bad terms and we cant stand to think or see them. I liked it. Great flow...nice language use. Good piece. |
| simpleplan13 2005-03-20 ch 1, | abusebeautiful.. I love hte edngin thanks for your review.. lol.. i apprecitae hte compliment and i do sleep nd eat but that's about it.. lol |
| M. R. Smale 2005-03-19 ch 1, | abuseVery powerful and just as well written. Keep up the great work! (I would have reviewed this sooner but I kept getting site not responding so I had to restart) |
| Thyrt 2005-03-19 ch 1, | abusecooleo!! that was really good, keep it up |