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| AboveTheSalt 2005-04-26 ch 1,  | abuseah this is beautiful. I've been studying this lately, very interesting that I find it now on your list of works. Love the imagery. It's a fascinating condition, to say the lest. Great topic. (& loved the last stanza. great allusions all the way through.) |
| twenty-second seduction 2005-04-20 ch 1, | abuseoh. wow. |
| Kelpylion 2005-04-18 ch 1, | abuseMelodrama! But I ate it up. Visceral and intense. Slightly idealized in emotion, but not unrealistic. Creative use of foods not normally referenced in poetry. Thank you for avoiding "Your kisses are sweet...like marshmallow bunnies (heart heart)," which is more or less what I (cynically) expected. Pleasant surprise. |
| TJ Henri 2005-04-08 ch 1, | abuseBravo. Never quite ventures into the full depths of its namesake (where is your smell? Mix everything and it melts beautifully) but is nevertheless a pleasurable meditation on what I can only imagine is your love. Mine too tastes like she sounds, and smells like she feels - ethereal. |
| Nobody-n-Particular 2005-04-03 ch 1, | abuseTrue, and eloquent in its imagery and diction. |
| Cyssel 2005-04-01 ch 1, | abuseI loved this! again this will be going on my favourites! you have an excellent talent words, and I particularly liked the last part, when you made allusions to the famous composers. excellent choice of words. i just love this. |
| Purple Honeydew 2005-03-20 ch 1, | abuseOh that's so tangible, not to mention delicious! Even though none of the things you describe actually have a taste, it makes perfect sense how it should be when you describe it with a flavour. This is one of my favourite poems I've read on Fictionpress...amazing! Keep up the amazing work! |
| Eyes Unclouded 2005-03-19 ch 1, anon. | abuseOkay, I'm doing an anonymous review so you can erase this if you want. I don't have time to review you more right now (I gotta go but I'll be back later), but I wanted to thank you immediately for the reviews! And thanks for catching that typo! I really need that story in perfect condition. ^_^ Thanks again! |
| Aslan Israel 2005-03-19 ch 1, | abuseWow. Great job with the sensory words. Very descriptive. |
| Eyes Unclouded 2005-03-18 ch 1, | abuseSynaesthesia!! All right! Finally - someone else knows what it is! Eh...erhm...back to the poem... Lovely. Made me hungry, actually. Maybe it should be called Dessert Synaesthesia? No, seriously - the imagery was really good and sort of casual - not forced. The reference to Lizst was interesting and it actually let me get a better idea of how the narrator was feeling. I'd love to add more comments, but for some reason the page won't load for me again so I can't get a second look at the poem (this awful computer I'm using...). I enjoyed this poem. Also, I read your profile, and I must agree - Furuba rocks! |
| really 2005-03-18 ch 1, | abuseAH THIS IS SO PRETTY. and i love the way the words just roll off the tongue like smooth dark chocolate. |