This just put a smile on my face. That is life, indeed.

that abrupt line.. :) well, yuck, but... suits... ~Lou~

*eyes tear up because self is so hysterical with laughter* That. Is. Awesome.

And actually quite sad, too, in a way.

I love your poems. The rhythm in this one is erratical, but it adds to the...well, i guess 'flavor' would be the only way to describe it. *scratches head* Although I guess 'atmosphere' could work, too. ^^ Congratulations on your marriage, by the way!

Ahem. Anyway, like I said, this is wonderful. The metaphor is really clever. You rock.

so beautiful, then as the pigeon **, your abrupt stop, puts us right there. Well done...you've got a great feel on how to structure and time.

Hehe. How cute and unexpected. Very nice.

KICK **!

lol. I liked it. Yeah, that's life. I bombed a math final today. Not even a full 40%. But it was precalculus, so who can blame me? I'm only 17 and I barely understand- writers don't do math, after all, they write! Well, this poem was much enjoyed. But I would probably have killed the bird.-Yin

haha, very true

hahah thats a very cute twist, I was like...aww pretty birdys...oh...nevermind... nice poem, funny.

Alice

LOL! Yes, that is life and you've captured it in it's truest form. Bravo.

Oh my, that was hilarious! It started off so beautifully, and then the harshness of reality just dropped on our heads (pun intended) so unexpectedly! You should categorize this poem under "Humor"! Two thumbs up. b^_^d

humorous and true at the same time. nice!

LOL, that was great. I loved it.

awesome

Tee-hee-hee . . .

"Life hits you on the head at unexpected moments."

Very clever.