|Reviews for Unfair|
| method acting 3/27/05 . chapter 1
wow. awesome :-)
| Soulshifter 3/24/05 . chapter 1
Interesting piece. I think it needs some refining as far as the style goes, it is very outward and hard to grasp. Otherwise I like it. The fact that you put so much into this person and then apologize for it is oddly striking.
| Aslan Israel 3/22/05 . chapter 1
Nothing's fair in love and war... goodness. Very heartfelt and pleading, thius peice. Good job.
| Squirrel Lejant 3/19/05 . chapter 1
very nice, i like it. one suggestion though. in the part where it says "Why didn’t you stop me sooner?/Why didn’t you stop it sooner?" i would personally switch it so it says "Why didn’t you stop it sooner?/Why didn’t you stop me sooner?" it just makes a bit more sense to go backwards chronologically in this case. tc and keep writing,-Ev