wow. awesome :-)

Interesting piece. I think it needs some refining as far as the style goes, it is very outward and hard to grasp. Otherwise I like it. The fact that you put so much into this person and then apologize for it is oddly striking.

Nothing's fair in love and war... goodness. Very heartfelt and pleading, thius peice. Good job.

very nice, i like it. one suggestion though. in the part where it says "Why didn’t you stop me sooner?/Why didn’t you stop it sooner?" i would personally switch it so it says "Why didn’t you stop it sooner?/Why didn’t you stop me sooner?" it just makes a bit more sense to go backwards chronologically in this case. tc and keep writing,-Ev